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Sunday, November 30, 2014

Thomas Writes His First Movie: The first scare.


Previously:

http://apeday.blogspot.ca/2014/11/my-first-movie-script-is-about-guy-whos.html


http://apeday.blogspot.ca/2014/11/tom-writes-movie-include-sex.html

INT - BEDROOM - NIGHT

Inside the bedroom Abigale is sleeping alone, the room is very dark. It's eerily quiet. Abigale wakes up, she's expecting to have someone beside her. The house is silent except for sounds of movement coming from downstairs in the kitchen. Curious, Abigale gets up to see what Douglas is doing down there. The house creeks with every step as she creeps her way to the door. Just as she's about to open the door Douglas bursts through to doorway, startling them both. 


DOUGLAS
GAHHHH!

ABIGALE
AHHH!!

DOUGLAS
What are you doing out of bed?!

ABIGALE
I was trying to find out what you were doing out of bed!

DOUGLAS
I got up...I heard noises. I keep hearing noises.

ABIGALE
Houses make noise.

DOUGLAS
Which I am not used to hearing because I lived in the city. I am not used to this kind of quiet.

Abigale goes over to her bedside table and turns on a loud fan, the sound drowns out all the other noise. She climbs back into bed.

ABIGALE
Come on. Help me get back to sleep.

Douglas climbs back into bed and wraps Abby up in his arms, the two fall asleep.

 INT - KITCHEN - MORNING

Close up on Abigale's face. She's staring at something that disturbs her. Her face wears an expression of confusion and pained disgust. She's staring downward at something she see's on the counter. She's tense.

Douglas rounds the bottom of the stairs into the kitchen. 

DOUGLAS
Hey Sweety.

He startles Abigale who quickly reaches down and crumples up a piece of paper. 

DOUGLAS
Sorry. Are you ok?

ABIGALE
Are YOU ok?

DOUGLAS
Yeah, why?

ABIGALE
You'd just tell me if something was bothering you, right?

DOUGLAS
Of course Abby. What's wrong?

ABIGALE
...nothing. I trust you.

DOUGLAS
Good to know. 

Douglas looks at the expression on Abigale's face, he knows there's something on her mind but she's seems like she wants to move past it. He asks once more.

DOUGLAS
Are you ok?

She doesn't answer, she just hugs him.

DOUGLAS
Ok...I love you.

ABIGALE
I love you.

Douglas leaves the room, Abigale takes one more look at the crumpled piece of paper in her hand, it still makes her tense. She tears it up and throws is out. Determined to forget about it. Whatever it was shook her up.
CONT'D...



Monday, November 24, 2014

TOM WRITES A MOVIE: Include Sex!

Part 1: In case you're too lazy to scroll down.


INT-KITCHEN/LIVING ROOM

Inside the house Richard is in the kitchen with Abigale cleaning up after their pizza dinner while Grant and Douglas are going through boxes in the living room.


GRANT
Where's your Playstation?  Let's hook that shit up.

DOUGLAS
Don't unpack anything. Do you see how weird he's being about this?

Douglas look back at Richard.

DOUGLAS
I am going to wait until he leaves before I really, y'know. Move in.

GRANT
Yeah he doesn't want you here, he kept asking about you when we were unloading. Like he was pumping me for information.

DOUGLAS
What's; he trying to dig up dirt on me?

GRANT
Yeah but look, if you were moving into my family house with my daughter I'd hate you too.

DOUGLAS
So would I but I'd at least hide it better.

Richard looks back at Douglas, they catch eyes for a second. Richard takes a hard look at Douglas and shakes his head in disapproval and confusion. He turns away. Douglas and Abigale catch eyes, they look at each other from the across the room. They both smile.

DOUGLAS
Whatever. He'll get over it.


Abigale walks in from the kitchen.

ABIGALE
I need you to run down to the basement and get my big serving plate.

DOUGLAS

What does that look like?

ABIGALE
It's this big plate.

DOUGLAS
Ok...

ABIGALE
And get my crystal pitcher, but only if it's clean.

DOUGLAS
Come with me. I don't even know what these things are.

ABIGALE

No, I never go in the basement. You go.

Douglas and Grant share a look.

DOUGLAS
Ok...

INT - BASEMENT

Douglas walks down the stairs to the cellar-like basement, it's very old. Very dank and poorly lighted. Douglas's face twists, something stinks. He hold his nose and rushes downstairs, searching through several shelves before finding a big plate. He finds the pitcher but it's covered in cobwebs, he discards it and runs back upstairs. He hands Abigale the plate, he's out of breath.

INT-LIVING ROOM

ABIGALE
Where's the pitcher?

DOUGLAS
Covered with spiders, its dead to us. Now I know why you wouldn't go down there. It smells like SHIT!

ABIGALE
Eww I wouldn't know, that's not why I don't go down there. I don't go down there because it's scary.

Douglas smiles at her.  God she's cute.

ABIGALE
Do you want some cake?

DOUGLAS
I want some alone time.

ABIGALE
(smiles coyly)
Cake fist.

Douglas and Abigale join Richard and Grant in the kitchen and start carving up the cake. Later they're saying goodbyes at the door. It's night time. Grant says goodbye to Douglas and hugs Abigale, it's a warm goodbye and in stark contrast to the cold goodbye that Richard offers, after hugging his daughter goodbye Richard darts out the door without so much as an acknowledgment towards Douglas. Douglas and Abigale kiss as the door closes. The lights in the downstairs turn out, the light in the bedroom turns on. 

CONT'D...

-APE-

That got sexy.





WTF?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????


I just found the weirdest little side note to a story.

I am sitting here reading a wikipedia page about an old Egyptian army that went missing in the desert because that's the kind of thing I do and something really jumped out at me. It was the words "severed penis". I thought "heh...weird, I wasn't expecting that to come into play". The accompanying explanation was weirder than I thought...I thought maybe they were chopping off their penises (I just learned I had no idea what the plural of the word 'penis' was) for ceremonial reasons. I knew I was reading an article about a lost ancient Egyptian army and I knew severed penises (or penii) were a part of this story in some way and my mind's first conclusion was that of a weird, ancient penis ceremony where they chop them off, maybe as a sacrifice to the gods. That wasn't it.
In November 2009, two Italian archaeologists, Angelo and Alfredo Castiglioni, announced the discovery of human remains, tools and weapons which date to the era of the Persian army. These artifacts were located near Siwa Oasis.[16] According to these two archaeologists this is the first archaeological evidence of the story reported by Herodotus. While working in the area, the researchers noticed a half-buried pot and some human remains. Then the brothers spotted something really intriguing—what could have been a natural shelter. It was a rock about 35 meters (115 feet) long, 1.8 meters (5.9 feet) high and 3 meters (9.8 feet) deep. Such natural formations occur in the desert, but this large rock was the only one in a large area.[17]

However, these "two Italian archaeologists" presented their discoveries in a film rather than a scientific journal. Doubts have been raised because the Castiglioni brothers also happen to be the two filmmakers who produced five controversial African shockumentaries in the 1970s—including Addio ultimo uomo, Africa ama, and Africa dolce e selvaggia—films in which audiences saw unedited footage of the severing of a penis, the skinning of a human corpse, the deflowering of a girl with a stone phallus, and a group of hunters tearing apart an elephant’s carcass.[18]

The Secretary General of the Egyptian Supreme Council of Antiquities, Zahi Hawass, has said in a press release that media reports of this "are unfounded and misleading" and that "The Castiglioni brothers have not been granted permission by the SCA to excavate in Egypt, so anything they claim to find is not to be believed."[19]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cambyses_II#The_lost_army_of_Cambyses

Why? Why didn't I have the 'safe search' turned on when I googled "penis ritual"?

Monday, November 17, 2014

My First Movie Script Is About A Guy Who's Girlfriend Thinks He Wants To Kill Her, But He Loves Her. It's Complicated.


I took a long break from this blog, as it turns out coming up with a movie to write can take a while. Months actually. It's a huge project to tackle, in terms of work load it's like writing three essays back to back. I know I have to do it though. Its something I've always wanted to do, I kind of feel like I need to. Still though, as motivated as I felt to get a script started it still took several frustrating weeks before I settled on an idea (my fifth actually) that I was confident enough with. All my other idea I picked apart, with this one though the more thought I gave it the more I came up with ideas to add to it. I set out to write a romantic comedy and I ended up with an idea for a "Romantic Comedy Horror Thriller". I am calling it "I am Not a Weirdo"

 I'm using this blog to write it. It's my first movie script. I am starting now.


"I AM NOT A WEIRDO"
by Thomas Holler


EXT - OUTSIDE ABIGALE'S HOUSE


Outside of a large, old house a moving van is being unloaded. The house is all white with old brick, old architecture and even old creepy statues scattered along the property. It's a very old house. On the truck two men are unloading the last of some boxes, the older of the two is Abigale's father Richard, he's being helped by Abigale's close friend Bryce. On the walkway to the house two more men have stopped. Douglas and Grant, both have boxes in their hands. Both have stopped dead in their tracks and are staring, eyebrows furled at one of the unnerving statues along the walkway. They stand face to face with an especially creepy statue.


GRANT
God...I bet as soon as night falls these things are coming alive and trying to kill you.

DOUGLAS
Don't put that in my head.

GRANT
So Abby lived here when she was a kid? These things must have given her nightmares.

DOUGLAS
Nah, my girl doesn't get nightmares. She smiles when she sleeps.

Abigale sneaks up behind them while they're inspecting the statue.

ABIGALE
(sarcastically)
Yeah so those boxes actually go inside the house.

DOUGLAS
Sorry Munchkin. We were meeting the neighbors.

Grant pics up his box and heads inside.

ABIGALE
Oooo...want me to introduce you. This is Bert and that's Ernie and Crispy over there. I named them when I was really little...obviously.

DOUGLAS
You were a brave kid, huh?

ABIGALE
Actually all of these statues used to scare me when I was a kid. 

DOUGLAS
Yeah (duh).

ABIGALE
But then my dad told me these were here to guard the house. They keep badguys away.

RICHARD
We'll see about that. 

Richard shoots Douglas a snarky look to go along with his snide remark as he walks past with the last of the boxes.

ABIGALE
He hasn't really warmed to you moving in here with me.

DOUGLAS
Oh, I noticed.

ABIGALE
I am his little girl and this is our family house, it means a lot to him.

DOUGLAS
He gave it to you.

ABIGALE
I know. He knows. Just give it time, let him get used to it.

Bryce politely walks up behind Abigale.

BRYCE
Hey, Abby. The truck's unloaded, I was actually thinking about getting going.

ABIGALE
Nooooo. Stay! I have to pay you back with pizza for helping me. 

BRYCE
(smiles)
Thanks but how about you owe me. Buy me lunch on Monday.

ABIGALE
Deal. 

The two hug.

ABIGALE
Thank you. You're the best.

DOUGLAS
It was nice meeting you Bryce. Thanks for helping out.

Bryce moves in, the two shake hands and lock eyes.

DOUGLAS
Appreciate it.

BRYCE
Don't mention it. Nice meeting you.

Bryce heads off to his car. Douglas picks up his box and heads inside with Abigale. Bryce looks back. The front door closes. The statues stay still.


...CONT'D

Alright, as far as first pages go I am happy with it. I've already introduced every major character. Success.


-APE-